Week 4 Notes

Aloha Kakou! 

Week 4 means you are half-way done with your double-credit English course! Woo-hoo! Hang in there!

If any of you want or need to finish your English course early, you can do any of the work in advance. 

These essays showed a lot of passion but not a lot of knowledge. Passion without knowledge is just noise.

Every claim you make, you must be able to back up. Captain Cook did not come from America to overthrow the queen and kill anyone who spoke Hawaiian. 

Real terrible things happened in Hawaiian history. Don't disrespect those real things by making things up. 

Find good sources, like this wonderful Punana Leo timeline, to back up your words.  

http://www.ahapunanaleo.org/index.php?/about/a_timeline_of_revitalization/

Plagiarizing vs. using sources:

If you find an article online about your topic, NEVER COPY AND PASTE ANY OF IT.

Here's how you use research online. 

1. Find articles from good sources (NOT ask.com, yahoo news, etc.)

2. READ the articles until you UNDERSTAND them.

3. Use the knowledge you gained to explain your ideas IN YOUR OWN WORDS.

4. Even if you use your own words, say where you got the information from.        According to Punana Leo... 

According to my dad, an organic farmer... 

5. If you find a source that says EXACTLY the idea you want in your essay, you PUT THEIR WORDS IN QUOTES. 

According to Punana Leo, in 1896, "Education through the Hawaiian language in both public and private schools is outlawed."

6. Once you use a quote from someone else, you have you use your own words to explain why that quote relates to your ideas. 

"This began a systematic oppression of the Hawaiian language by schools that demoralized and disempowered the Hawaiian speaking population." 

One last important point! Book Reports are due on Friday.  MAKE SURE YOU HAVE CHOSE ONE OF THE OPTIONS. (Click here for more details, including rubrics: http://kawaikinienglish.blogspot.com/2016/04/how-do-we-book-report.html) 

Remember to have another person look over your essays and book reports before you turn them in. Another set of eyes can help you catch any big problems.

Aloha students and parents,

I'm excited to hear your thoughts about why olelo Hawaii is important in your informative essays this week! 

Not sure what an informative essays looks like? Go here: http://kawaikinienglish.blogspot.com/p/wait-whats-essay-again.html

The final grades on the essays are based on the IMPROVEMENTS you make between the draft and the final. 

These improvements are not just my small suggested edits but THE BIG CHANGES I SUGGEST in the rubric at the bottom of the page.

Read what I write (highlighted in yellow) and make those changes. THAT IS THE BASIS OF YOUR GRADE. It looks like this:

Skill	What I will look for:	Draft Notes	Final Notes
Sentence Fluency	Varied sentence lengths, natural sounding sentences, connecting words (aka subordinating conjunctions) like although, after, because, before, if, since, though, unless, until, when, whenever, where, wherever, and while Active voice, not passive voice (not “the pizza was eaten by him” but “he ate the pizza”)	This was so nice and clear! Make sure each sentence is a whole thought.

Good luck! Carry on! Mai ha'awi pio!

Me ke aloha,

Kumu Becca